Showing posts with label Novels. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Novels. Show all posts

Tuesday, February 19, 2019

Editing - What's Working for Me So Far


Not sure if anyone out there would find this helpful, but I do. It's often said that when editing, try reading your work aloud or print it out -- do something that sets it apart from what you're used to staring at day in and day out while you wrote the thing.

Now, I'm not going to waste money printing out my 300+ page novel, nor am I going to risk getting in trouble and print it at work. And printing it out in a point size of 6 just to cram the words into a fewer number of pages? Well, that Hell would almost be as bad as the editing process in general. So I do this, and it has been working so far.

I export my WIP as a .mobi file (easy to do when using Scrivener) and save it to my Kindle. Not only does it give me a different way to perceive my story, it allows me to TAKE NOTES! I use my finger to highlight everything wrong and jot a small note that I'll go back to later after I've been through the whole damn thing. That's actually where I'm at now: I marked over 600 things and am going through my WIP in Scrivener, fixing what needs fixing. Luckily these are all little things -- removing passive voice and rewording clunky sentences.

Friday, February 15, 2019

Wait, What? Er... I Still Have a Blog?!


Yeah, I know. I am a horrible, horrible blogger. There's not much I can say to vindicate myself, but I'm going to try like hell anyway.

Not Much to Talk About (until now)
The main reason is that I don't have much to promote at the moment. A few short stories, sure, but they've been out there for several years now. The other reason is that I figure any time spent writing on here would be better spent on my novel -- 'Walk a Web of Spiders'.

Yep, that one. The one I've been working on for forever. Well, it's not for a lack of discipline or motivation. I've maintained the same writing schedule every day since I started writing it -- 2 - 3 hours every morning (holidays, weekends, vacations be damned!) But on the weekdays, I have to stop and go to work. On the weekends I stop when my kids and wife wake up so we can hang out and do stuff.

But I'm updating the blog now. So there must be something worth writing about, right? Yaasss! 'Walk a Web of Spiders' is so close to done it's ridiculous. In fact, I'm giving it one more spit shine and then it'll be ready for querying. I'm really excited about it. Just to get it to this point is amazing to me. I've learned a lot in the rewrites/drafts since.

The biggest thing I've learned is that so much time is required AFTER you think it's ready. Ready, to me, was the state it was in in November -- a 140K suspense story that had gone through 5 drafts, followed by two read-throughs by me on my Kindle to fix glaring mistakes,  followed by a beta read by 20 or so people, and then followed by another draft to fix the mistakes found by my beta readers.

I then tackled the query (took a day or two. not bad). And the synopsis (a week, and man that was a sucky week... but I did it). Feeling smug with myself, I sent my query to queryshark, expecting Janet to tell me how great it was. NOPE. Not only was the query shredded but, more importantly, Janet told me what I kinda already knew but tried to ignore anyway -- 140K is too long for a suspense story. So I cried got out the ax and started chopping. Let me take a second to say how great the queryshark website is. The advice is invaluable. For as bad as my initial query was it would have been twenty times worse if I hadn't gone through the queryshark archives. So anyway, yeah. My query sucked. My novel was far too long.

Stephen King has a quote that I latched onto during that time: “When your story is ready for rewrite, cut it to the bone. Get rid of every ounce of excess fat. This is going to hurt; revising a story down to the bare essentials is always a little like murdering children, but it must be done.”

Oh it hurt, but it felt right too. November was basically dedicated to this process and by the end I was down to something promising -- a 108K suspense novel that flowed a lot better. Still not as slim as I wanted, but (at the time) as slim as I could get it.

Then the query. I rewrote it and tried again. QueryShark also offers a paid service, where she'll review not only your query but the first five pages and help you revise it up to two times. I took her up on it and holy hell... Janet cut about 350 words of fat from the first five pages. And I saw it. I saw what she did, the tone she set. So what I did next was carry it on throughout the rest of the novel. Guess what. I am now staring at a 98K word suspense novel that freakin' hums, and it's accompanied by a kick-ass query.

And now? Well, again, I thought I was done. Stupid me. I threw the MS on my Kindle and started my reread. I'm about 60% done with the reread and so far have marked over 200 separate things to change -- little things like removing passive voice and random bits of clunkiness. I'm hoping this is the final pass. I'm actually pretty confident that it will be. Then onto querying for realz.

Wish me luck!



-- Tim

Tuesday, March 3, 2015

Why, Hello There!

Damn, it's been quite some time since I've posted. As promised, I'm bad with keeping a regular schedule, especially when there's not much new going on with my writing. I'm still writing every day, usually in the morning before I go to work. I'm still working on the same novel I've been writing for quite some time.

Unfortunately, I had a little setback with the WIP, a story that I'm calling "Walk a Web of Spiders". I was hoping to have the third draft done by now. If you've been playing along, you'll say, "Hey...weren't you working on something called 'Air'?" Yeah well...I was...I am. The set back was that I got about halfway through with the third draft of my WIP, and realized that I wasn't happy with the direction it was going. The first half was fine, but the main plot really started kicking in during the second half, and that (I think) had the potential to sink the whole damn thing. Therefore, I pretty much scrapped the main plot and started rewriting the second part from scratch. Luckily, it didn't impact the first part much at all. So all of you beta readers who read the first part of "Air", you'll be happy (I hope) to hear that what you read won't change (except for the feedback I'll incorporate). So currently, I'm about 3/4 of the way done with the story's 2nd half, which... if my math is right, is ... ah nevermind.

One thing I've been having a lot of fun with is Google Plus's #SaturdayScenes, a community started by +John Ward where writers can share their work with fellow writers and get very useful feedback. This feedback has been so helpful with my writing. Case in point, I've been sharing the aforementioned WIP scene by scene over the past few months, and the community members really seemed to respond well to one of the subplots... So well, in fact, that it made me rethink (and eventually rewrite) the rest of the story.

As I said, the first half of the story won't change too much, except for the normal progression through the revision process. That part of the story I'm comfortable calling the '3rd draft'. I'm going to periodically post scenes to Wattpad. Feedback is always welcomed and appreciated!

That's about it. I'll try to keep up with the blog more, but again... no promises.

Thanks for reading!

-- Tim.

Tuesday, April 1, 2014

First Draft Completed, Now What?

Good evening all!

I'm back from a long, long, long hiatus from the blog, but it was for the best of reasons. I spent every day since early December working on a new project, the first draft of a story that I'm calling 'Air'. I set a weekly word goal of 7,777 words  (don't ask me why...seemed like a good a number as any), and each week I made sure that I hit or surpassed my goal.

I'm here to tell you that I've done it! I now stand at the far end of that tunnel, the four-month-long tunnel in which we spoke in front of at the time of my last post, when I said that I was going to be starting a new project soon. Do you see me leaning in from behind its stony lip? Can you make out that thing I'm waving in my hand while I grin a victorious grin? Well, I'll tell you. It's a completely-finished first draft! And it's so much more. It's 129,000 words worth of clay. There's some semblance of what it can become. I can see it even now, though to most it is still lost in the pudgy, shapeless folds that looks more like mechanically separated chicken than anything else. That's okay. I am armed with my scalpel... ready to carve something beautiful that everyone (hopefully) can enjoy. And yes...it's a bit daunting.

You see, I've written a few short stories before, two of which have gotten published in magazines. I've written the first draft of a 100k novel but it was full of dead ends and obstacles that were too mountainous for my level of experience. I (temporarily) put it aside. Some day, I'll go back to it, I swear. For now, my experience with actual editing stops with the completion of those aforementioned short stories. 5K words compared to what I'm looking at with 'Air'...big difference... a helluva big difference.

I've been doing a lot of research on different methods of editing. A lot of what I'm planning is being pulled directly from Chuck Wendig's playbook. You can find it here. It's a great and very helpful post, one every hopeful writer should read.

One of Chuck's first suggestions is to get feedback from beta readers. OK, great. But there's a problem already. I've shown up to the marathon, just shy of the gunshot that will start me barreling towards the finish line, only to realize that I left my damn running shoes at home. My story is chock full of unfinished scenes, plot holes and dialogue so far out there that a conversation between two crack whores would seem more intellectual. Some characters have mullets and drug problems in scene 10, but then are corporate CEOs with sexy last names by scene 20. I won't even go into all the time paradoxes and location inconsistencies.

So what am I to do? I can't send this slosh of horse manure to beta readers. It'll make their head explode, and that won't help me. I think I have a plan figured out. Before I'm ready for beta readers, I will take care of the following:

  • Characters: For each of the major and minor characters, create a character-detail page. This page will have descriptive information, personality information, history, notes, hobbies, mannerisms, etc. Create a keyword out of the character's full name and link it to this detail page. (I use Scrivener, and I highly recommend it to everyone. Click here for an idea of what I'm talking about when it comes to keywords. Then search all scenes for that character. If the character has a relevant presence in a scene, attach the character's keyword to the scene. After visiting all of those scenes, you'll not only have a comprehensive list of all scenes in which this character participates, you'll also have the description page instantly available to make sure all the character info jives across all the scenes. I'll then do this for all the characters...well...all the characters that deserve it.
  • Timeline: Create a timeline on a separate page that has all the major and the more important minor events that take place in the story. Also include the ages of the participating characters when these events occurred. Shuffle the scenes around to the proper order based off the timeline (Again...Scrivener to the rescue. One of the beauties of Scrivener is the ability to easily move scenes around).
  • Marking Plots/Subplots: This goes hand in hand with the timeline bullet. Just as I created keywords for the characters, create keywords for the plots/subplots and attach them to the scenes as well. The beauty here is that if I want to navigate a particular plot from beginning to end to see how it flows, I can do a search for that plot's keyword and be shown only the scenes that have that keyword attached. Awesomeness to the nth degree!
  • Places: Create a keyword for all the relevant places that pop up more than once in the story and attach it to the scenes where the location is mentioned. Also create a location-description page if necessary and attach the keyword there as well. Just like for the characters, what we have is an easy way to find all the relevant scenes and make sure the descriptions all jive. 

I think that after I complete these things, the draft will be ready to see the light of day... at least to a select few beta readers. At that point, I'd love to share how the process worked (or not). Give me a two weeks or so...I'll be back

Thanks for reading!

--Tim

Tuesday, December 10, 2013

'A Taste' and Other Happenings

It's been quite a time since I've updated my blog, but that's okay. I've been busy with the good stuff... writing.

First and foremost, I am excited to say that my short story, A Taste, has been published in the December issue of an awesome magazine called Under the Bed magazine. You can download it to your Kindle, Nook or directly from the magazine's website. No matter what your source, please be kind and leave a review!

In my drunken state of euphoria, I'm giving away The Death Bump, another short story of mine. You can download it here. If you like what you read, I definitely encourage you to buy the December issue of Under the Bed magazine.

In other news... NaNoWriMo went very well. I managed to get over 60k worth of words done in The Sorcerer's Paragon: Book 2. My goal was to write 2k words a day, and I made sure that I stuck to it. I think outlining the entire book beforehand helped a great deal. I used the snowflake method, a method that I described in an earlier post.

As I mentioned in that post, I followed the snowflake method to the letter. While it had its positives, I have to admit that in the long run (in my case anyway), the negatives piled up higher. I got the point where I was so concerned with hitting each part of the outline that my character's own voice got a bit muted in the process. I ignored his input. I didn't let him lead the dance, which was stupid on my part because it is, after all, his dance. The poor guy is little more than a marionette on a string, a cardboard cutout going through the motions instead of being a living, breathing entity. The whole damn thing discouraged me enough to put the WIP aside for the time being.

But that's okay. It's only temporary. I'll fix it sooner than later. And besides, it gave me incentive to begin something that has been thickening in my mind for quite some time, something that I'm really excited about. I began drafting another story that I'm calling Air for the time being. Eventually, I'll go back to Book 2 and complete the first draft, but I feel like I need to get some of Air on virtual paper. This one will be done in the pantser mentality. I have an idea of where I want it to go and a very rough idea of how the characters might get there. I have some of their back story figured out, but I'm looking forward to being surprised by them.

Ok. Back to NaNoWriMo and lessons learned. I learned the importance of sticking to a schedule. Even when my muse decided to leave me by the wayside, even when I was feeling as creative as a freakin' rock, I forced myself to sit at my desk and simply put one word after another until I reached my daily goal. Sometimes the tap refused to loosen, and I struggled for each and every drop. Other times the words poured out like a flood onto the paper. No matter what, I didn't call it a day until I got my 2k words down.

I think I can sum up the importance of keeping to a writing schedule by leaving you with two very good quotes from two very good authors.

“Talent is cheaper than table salt. What separates the talented individual from the successful one is a lot of hard work.”

- Stephen King


“I write only when inspiration strikes. Fortunately it strikes every morning at nine o'clock sharp.”

― W. Somerset Maugham


Good stuff, right? That's all for now!


Thanks for reading!

-- Tim

Tuesday, July 16, 2013

Ding Ding Ding...It is Time...It Is Time for an Outline!

Ah July! It's a love/hate thing. I love it because it's my birth month, I have off of work for the 4th and there's always mowers humming and charcoal burning somewhere. That crap gets me all sentimental and nostalgic...picnics by the creek with my elders when I was a kid, Creedence crackling over the radio, etc...

Then there's the HATE part. Yes, it's in caps on purpose. July's ugly side means swamp-ass turned up to 11 and a sticky hotness that makes breathing seem like I'm trying to suck in air through a tube filled with putrid, moist gym socks. It means gnats, mosquitoes and having the kids complain about getting to bed while it's still light out. Goodbye comfortably-drinking-coffee-on-the-deck-in-the-early-morn. Hello sunburn and heatstroke!

By midsummer, I always yearn for Fall. This year is no different, though I do have an additional reason to be apprehensive of July and giddy for next season: NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month).

NaNoWriMo is basically this: Write a 50,000 novel in one month. You have from November 1st to 11:59:59pm on November 30th to do it...definitely no small feat. I've never participated in it before, and I am really excited to give it a shot. Should I "win" and surpass 49,999 words, I get, above all, bragging rights. I believe they also give out a certificate and web badge that marks the accomplishment.

Now, how the hell am I supposed to write so much in so little time when I've been working on my first novel, "The Sorcerer's Paragon" for over a year? I am floating about halfway through its second draft. Some days I feel like I'm equipped with a paddle and get through quite a bit. Other days, I'm treading water with merely my cupped, wrinkled hands. What I need for NaNoWriMo is a freakin' outboard motor!

Well, I think I found said motor. It has a name, and that name is outlining. This is where my new apprehension of July comes from. Many moons ago, I slated July to be the month (come hell or high water) that I would gently push my WIPs to the side and squeeze in outlining for book two in preparation for NaNoWriMo...and here we are. Time to figure out a way to get this outline junk out of the way.

Mind you that outlining is, in a way, new to me. I wrote "The Sorcerer's Paragon" from the seat of my pants. I took an intriguing idea and set it free to sodomize MS Word to its heart's content. My role was to just hang on for the ride. This led to an experience that was fun as hell to write, but I'm paying for it now. The story has grown to something a bit more complex than I originally anticipated, and I'm pretty sure that outlining my ideas prior to starting the first draft would have helped tremendously.

I've researched lots of different outline methods, tried a few and finally settled on the snowflake method. To quote the famous Al Bundy, I'm going to "Throw it in the oven and see if it bakes", "Run it up the flagpole and see if it waves"..."Put it in bed with Madonna and see if she sleeps with it."

I'm not going to go into too much detail, but in a nutshell, you start with a one sentence summary of your story and then expand it to a paragraph. You do the same with your main characters. Then you just keep expanding...building it out a little at a time until it evolves into the skeleton of your story. Supposedly it allows you to find and fix flaws before you even begin your first draft, and that makes sense to me. Many times, I found myself sifting through the first draft of "The Sorcerer's Paragon" pissed off at how the chapters refused to line up. A lot of rewrites and rethinking was necessary to get the flow I wanted. I'm still going through that process. If outlining can help me there...I'm in!

The panser side of my brain is a bit upset at me. It yells out, "I call B.S.! You enjoy the surprises hidden in every carriage return! Abort! Abort!"

I scream back, thwarting its logic, "I'm still finding surprises as I flesh out the outline! Shut up, damn you!" Then I awkwardly drop my head as people begin to stare.

As Chuck Wendig says, "To me this is the same dilemma of whether or not you want to know the sex of your baby before it’s born — to me, it’s still a surprise if I learn that fact at 20 weeks and that gives me another 20 weeks to figure out what kind of clothes to buy the little critter."

If you want to read more about the snowflake method, here is it is broken down in steps. I may very well get halfway through it and find it useless, but at the moment I'm digging it. Whatever happens, I'll be sure to let you know.

The hope is that my outline for book two will be done by early to mid August. Then I can concentrate on completing the second and subsequent drafts of book one. When November hits...I'll be ready! I'll be sitting on my deck, watching the rust-colored leaves dance their way down to the frosty ground as my cup 'o Joe breathes steamy breaths into the chilled morning air.

Thanks for reading!


-- Tim


Tuesday, July 9, 2013

The ever-adjusting eyes of a writer

This post was going to be solely about writing and my progress with my writing, but first I'm going to lament about a situation I experienced yesterday. If you wish to abort...I guess now's the time.

First let me describe for you an item...a cylinder, a decently hefty one...big enough for me and two friends to crouch inside, but otherwise nothing special. It's made of metal, isn't necessarily anything pretty to look at and is used to store the flammable, liquid remains of long dead and highly pressurized organisms: an oil tank.

From that description, it doesn't sound like the freakin' sealed sludge bowl should require some vast sum of money to obtain, but let me tell you I may have to shove fiddles in my kids' hands and drive them to the subway to earn me a few bucks. Neither my 7 year old nor my 4 year old can play the fiddle, they can both play that 'cute' card all day long. So we're good.

Yep, my oil tank, which must be nearly as old as the creatures that make up the fuel, decided to get gut rot. It's not leaking par say, but it has rusted enough for the oil company to deny me any more deliveries until I get a replacement. At least I have their names, and I will enjoy casting them as victims in my next story, since that's the going rate for raping my wallet.

...teeth unclenching...deep breath...pressure gauges resetting to green...well...maybe yellow...

So here we go. Back to the original purpose of this post: my writing.

I've always heard that your first writing projects suck. They're supposed to suck. It's just a fact of life, and I'm supposed to deal with it. Funny...my first WIP was absolutely boss! For the entire first draft, I was a story-spinning maniac at the helm of something spectacular.

Deep down, I really knew better. I knew I was suffering from 'ugly baby syndrome' (it's my baby, and it's freakin' adorable...to hell with what you think!). It worried me. After all, I have been pouring endless galaxies of time in my novel for more than a year. I don't want it to be time wasted. I don't want to finish the thing only to be told how horrible it is. But how am I supposed to get better if I fail to see the flaws? That was my concern.

I do the homework that should help me to get better. I'm an avid reader, I follow blog posts and community postings on how to improve my writing style. I know about beta readers, but my story isn't ready for that yet. So how am I truly supposed to get better when I am the one and only (and biased) critic?

In poker, it's easy to improve; I see the mistakes. If I go all-in with 2 7, I deserve to walk home shirtless...but at least I learn. By the way, big slick is a shit hand but that story's for another day. Writing seems to be a whole other animal, so how does one not only improve but realize that they're improving?

Interesting...the question was answered the moment I dove head first into my second draft. I originally thought that draft numero dos was defined by touch ups, grammatical corrections, story flow adjustments, yadda, yadda, yadda. Instead it began with the mass murder of entire chapters because they no longer fit or because they were comparable to dog diarrhea. It was heart-wrenching to be sure, but it was enlightening as well. And it got better as I moved forward.

I initially went in guns blazing, but by the time I got to chapter 10, where I basically am right now, there's less of that. More of the original draft is surviving. More chapters are getting polished instead of rewritten.
I am actually watching the transformation of a sucky writer to a less sucky writer, and it makes me really look forward to what the 3rd draft will show me.

So if you're in a similar situation, where you're worried about how bad you are, maybe go back to something you've written in the past. Compare it to what you're doing now and see how far you've come. I bet you'll see a difference.

And if your oil tank beings leaking, well...good luck! I feel your pain.


Thanks for reading!

--Tim





Sunday, February 24, 2013

Status of Things

Good evening all!

Even though the better part of my week (nights and weekend included) was claimed by ongoing IT-related projects, I still managed to decently chip away at my writing projects as well.

Critiques for my latest short story, "A Taste", have been coming in over the past two weeks, thanks to my amazing beta-readers. Over the last week, I've gathered and summed their critiques and fixed a lot of things that both the readers and I thought were lacking in the story. Yesterday and today, I put a few more rounds of polish on it. There isn't much more to do before I start submitting "A Taste" to different publications. I'm really excited about this story.

Though I love my first published short story, "The Death Bump", I can easily see how much my writing skills have improved since then. One beta-reader actually said that certain parts of "A Taste" made her 'shudder'. It's awesome to hear something like that.

Speaking of "The Death Bump", I'm thrilled to announce that it has been added to www.barnesandnoble.com. If you haven't already, please download it, read it and tell me what you think. It's free!

Lastly, with my short story nearly completed, I went back to the second draft of "The Sorcerer's Paragon". Currently editing chapter 5 of 34, I know that I have a long way to go, but I am at a good place and hope to have more to report on it soon.

One more thing: if you would be interested in being a beta-reader, please let me know. I'd be grateful for your help!

Thanks for reading!

-- Tim


Friday, February 8, 2013

Next Stop on the Blog Hop

Wow! Two posts in one week? The planets must be in perfect alignment or something! You can thank Mr. +Andrew Gaeta for this special occasion  just as I thank him. He was kind enough to link to my blog in  a "Blog Hop", which until last week, I had never heard of.

I recently met Andrew in a Google+ Community called "Writer's Discussion Group". It's a fantastic place filled with writers of all kinds. There is more talent and spirit to be found there than I could ever hope to detail justly. Please check out his blog. If you like my writing style, I think you'll find that he is right up your alley.




Without further ado...onto the questions!


Q. What is the name of your work in progress?
A. My novel is currently titled "The Sorcerer's Paragon", but as the draft count increases, so does the likelihood that the title will change.

Q. Where did the idea come from for the book?
A. I actually came up with the story in a backwards manner. I thought of a twist that would take place at the end, something that really made me think, "Wow! That's F-d up!"  Okay, okay...that's only part of it. The other part stems from my love of the old-school fantasy games: Legend of Zelda, Final Fantasy...anything where you needed to travel over vast, beautiful, and yet dangerous lands in order to reach a certain state (state of mind, state of strength, state of magic, etc.). Only when that state is reached can you go on to fulfill your destiny.

Q. What genre does your book fall under?
A. Fantasy, definitely...I wouldn't quite call it dark fantasy, though I do have ogres, not unicorns.

Q. Which actors would you choose to play your characters in a movie rendition?
A. Gary Oldman would make an excellent choice for Silas W., the main character's teacher. As for the main character...some up-and-coming actor who hasn't had any major breakthrough roles.

Q.  What is the one sentence synopsis of your book?
A.  I'm very sorry for cheating, but I have yet to master the one-sentence synopsis. Here is the 5-sentence version:

Garridan Beastu is a boy almost of age, a boy with remarkable but unknown powers. Although he is unaware of the magic coursing through his veins, The King of Dradu is not as blind. He has visions of a boy capable of destroying his kingdom and calls for Garridan's swift execution. With the aid of a mysterious sorcerer, Garridan manages to escape the attack, but his loved ones are not as lucky. Armed with the teachings of his new friend, Garridan takes on a quest of vengeance, a quest that requires the awakening of his power, one that will end with nothing but the king's demise.

Q. Will your book be self-published or represented by an agency?
A. I plan on running it through the machine out of curiosity if nothing else. Honestly, I am really on the fence whether to self-publish or not. I would be proud to release it either way. Let's see how my tune changes after the first few dozen rejection notices. :)

Q.  How long did it take you to write the first draft of your manuscript?
A. Far too long. I'd say about a year. This novel is my first, and I spent a lot of time cleaning up after myself once I figured out what the hell I was doing. I didn't plan properly from the get-go. I didn't outline. I had tons of info-dumps to contend with...yadda yadda yadda.

Q. What other books would you compare this story to within your genre?
A. This is a loose answer...but if I HAVE to choose I'd say the following: The Hobbit, because of the quest aspect and A Game of Thrones, because of how the different POV characters contribute their own voice to flesh out the different "sides" of the story.

Q.  Who or what inspired you to write this book?
A. A few things actually. I have a love for quests, as I eluded to in an earlier question. On a deeper level, I was inspired by the many facets of human nature. The main character has a reason for his quest: revenge, revenge for the family that was taken from him. But during his quests, he learns that there are more important things. The story also has a secondary POV character. Throughout, he struggles with whether to side with his conscience or his king's wishes. In the end, it's the characters that make a story come to life. So I'm inspired by the fact that it's my job to make them as lifelike as possible and that it's my job to tell their story justly.

Q. What else about your book might pique the readers' interest?
A. My story belongs to the fantasy genre...it's true. I have magic, enchantments, wondrous creatures and beautiful/dangerous worlds. But I also have deeply seeded human elements that are discovered through the eyes of very interesting characters. Revenge, betrayal, the love of family, and the willingness to stand up for what you believe in no matter what the costs may be...these are the elements that the reader will find. These are the elements that will pull the reader in and let them breath the same air as the heroes and villains alike.


Whew...that was draining. Now it's my turn to introduce the next writer in the blog hop, +Jessie Mahoney. I have been following her blog for awhile, and it's very good. She's the author of the The Community Vampire Series, and her novels can be purchased on Barnes and Noble, Amazon, LuLu and SmashWords. Stop by and visit her here. She has some excerpts from her books available...you won't be disappointed!

Monday, February 4, 2013

Unveiling the Hero

After countless drafts, I am comfortable with sending my hero out into the ether, just to introduce him to you (if only for a quick hello).  His name is Garridan Beastu, and though he doesn't know it yet, great things are in store for him, if he can overcome the challenges. He is the main character of my novel, "The Sorcerer's Paragon", which is currently undergoing its second draft.

This scene is my favorite so far. To me, it captures the mood just as I wanted it to. In it, Garridan is attending the Harvest Promise Festival with his sister, Carling. Unbeknownst to him, his world is less than a few hours from unraveling.

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Quick bursts of green, blue and pink skyfire lit up the night and rained down upon the clearing in brilliant, spiny fingers. Each one thudded powerfully against Garridan’s body, quivering his insides to jelly and causing Carling, who was perched mightily upon his shoulders, to tense up around his neck as if her life depended on it. He could barely hear her laughter over the booms.

The clearing had been thriving with people ever since late afternoon, when the Harvest Promise Festival began. Tents, produce tables, makeshift spits and game booths dotted the land but were all abandoned when the skyfire started.

Garridan looked around at his fellow villagers. Everyone was standing shoulder to shoulder in awe and silence with their eyes stationed at the heavens, their faces awash with the colors dictated from above.

Carling squeezed him tightly as another one sounded over the land, and he looked up to catch its aftermath. This one seemed to be directly above them. Blue sparks swam down from the sky and dissolved into nothing as they neared. For a moment, Garridan pretended that there was no one else in the world but he and his sister. The open night sky filled his eyes, and the trees wrapped around his periphery. Beyond the veil of thin smoke shone the stars and an elegant moon whose light would cast a calm brilliance over the land if not for the constant bombardment of skyfire.

The perfect end to a perfect day, he thought.

The festival was truly alive and shy to not one of the senses. Even from the very beginning, when he and Carling were still playing their own games, he could feel its energy creeping in. It laced the crisp air, riding on the sounds of woodwind music, dressed with the thump of deep drums that brought the villagers together in dance. It set the tempo for the rest of the evening. Carling, more than once, caught Garridan eyeing the more attractive girls as the music rippled through them, but she didn’t seem to mind.

“So you like dancing?” she laughed as she grabbed his arm and parodied the older girls.

It wasn’t long before the scent of food rivaled the music for rights to the breeze. Roasted ducks and chickens sizzled and snapped from their spits and set free an aroma that made his mouth water. It blended with the smells of fresh made candies and baked goods that lingered on still, even after the skyfire’s sour smoke settled over them.

Carling’s legs squeezed his shoulders again, returning him to the moment. That’s when he saw him, past the wide gap of the clearing, beyond the heavy sprinkle of villagers that could look nowhere but up. The man dressed in black, the outsider. In a fevered pace, the dark figure was skirting the forest, and though masked by night and only given up by the thick foliage in slivers, Garridan could sense his urgency.

Garridan swung his eyes over the crowd, careful not to move his body, careful not to garner Carling's attention. No one else seemed to notice the man just as the man didn’t seem to notice anything at all. He simply continued on, dodging brush and outstepping the clutches of the forest floor.

Suddenly, as he was about to leave Garridan’s periphery, the man charged into the forest. Another boom of skyfire swallowed the land in pink hues, but Garridan barely took notice. Instead, his eyes were pinned to the forest’s threshold, waiting for something else, anything else.

Then it happened, though the timing was such that yellow skyfire took all the praise and no one else but Garridan saw it. Pure light pulsed from within the trees, near where the outsider pushed through just moments ago...one succinct, subtle blast. For as short-lived as it was, the light grabbed an old piece of Garridan’s soul and wouldn’t shake loose. He knew what brought the light. His father had spoken of it with such vigor after he went mad.

“Magic,” he gasped.

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Saturday, December 22, 2012

Writing Process By Tim

Good evening all! It's been quite some time since my last update. For that I apologize. That being said, I've been keeping true to my writing routine: daily before work and weekends before the kids get up. The second draft of my novel is coming along nicely. Of course I wish the pace was a little faster, but all in all I'm happy with the progress. I have the first five chapters of my novel completed. I let some willing souls beta-read them for me (thanks to you all). The response has been positive so far.

My story 'A Taste' hasn't been touched in months. I blame it on my novel; I've been spending all my writing time on that. I may actually put the novel on the back burner this weekend and try working on the short story for a change of pace. As I said before, the first draft is complete, so I have to concentrate on adding a bit more color to it.

As I was working on my story this morning, I took a step back and thought about my particular writing process...that it might be interesting to talk about. Why? Because I don't really like it that much. But since it has worked for me so far, I won't be changing it anytime soon.

To me, the ideal style would be to crank out an entire story in a way that's akin to carving a wooden sculpture with an ax, wildly chopping away until a rough, vague idea of what was intended stands before me. Then, only when the course has been charted from beginning to end, would I go back and etch with a fine blade until the masterpiece I envisioned comes to life.

How does that differ from my method, you ask? This is generally how things go (don't laugh): I first define the purpose for the chapter, what the chapter needs to accomplish in the grand scheme of the story (so far...nothing unusual). Then I start writing, hoping to do what I mentioned above...write like a mad man until I reach the end, saving the fine-tuning for a later date. I can get through a few paragraphs in that manner if I'm lucky...a few sentences if I'm not. The next thing I do is reread what I wrote and fine-tune it to no end until I am absolutely satisfied that it is as perfect as it can be. 

After that, I write some more in that lovely, loose fashion until I find myself compelled to revisit the very first sentence and reread the entire thing again. I again make my myriad of edits and updates until I am thrilled with the results. So it goes until I finally carve out an entire chapter. I feel like I'm knitting a sweater, always tightening the stitches that I already completed, while the rest of the threads dangle hopelessly below. Because of this insane method, each chapter takes weeks upon weeks to complete. On the plus side, once a chapter is done the subsequent drafts are little more than touch ups.

If there are any other writers out there reading this, I'd be curious to your process. How to you pull the stories from your mind and pour them on the paper? In dribs and drabs or by the pail full?

Thanks for reading!

-- Tim

Saturday, September 22, 2012

September Updates

Just as the grass is coming into fruition, so are my writing projects! I am proud to say that I have unofficially completed the 1st draft of "The Sorcerer's Paragon"! WOO HOO! I say unofficial because I know there are a few chapters that need to be added. The 2nd draft phase, unfortunately, won't simply consist of spelling corrections and word-choice revisions like I thought, but chapter additions/rewrites, character additions/coloring, etc. There is still a lot of work to be done, but it is moving along at a reasonable pace.

I haven't started the 2nd draft of "A Taste", my second short story, like I promised I would. My intention was to start the 2nd draft after completing the 1st draft of my novel. The reality is is that I'm having way too much fun working on the novel. I like the direction "A Taste" is going, and I'm sure I'll pick it up again soon...just not yet.

"The Death Bump" is no longer available on the online version of Allegory Magazine (sad face), since their Fall issue is now available. If you want to get "The Death Bump" from there, it still can be retrieved in print form via their archives. I think there's a small charge for it. Now I am wondering what to do with that short story. I guess my options are to display it freely for all to see (like it was on Allegory's site) or try to shop it around some more. For now, I think I'm going to keep it to myself until I get more accomplished with my other projects. But if anyone would like to read it again or for the first time, please let me know, and I will gladly ship it your way!

Thanks for reading!

-- Tim


Tuesday, August 14, 2012

The Sorcerer's Paragon - intro

While I'm still working on the first draft of my novel, certain chapters are more "done" than others. This is a portion of one such chapter. Comments welcome!

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Durwin Maggaster stood looking from just inside his chamber’s balcony and into the sprawl of rolling hills that stretched into the blackness of Asper Forest. The moonlight was stolen by the heft of storm clouds, and it was only because of the occasional bout of lightening that his sight escaped his fort’s outer walls at all.

He let out a sigh, just to have it swallowed by thunder. If it weren’t for the arrival of the High Guard, he would be home sipping summer wine by the warmth of the fire, but as a knight of The Swords of Dradu and lord of Asper Forest, his place was here awaiting his commander. After all, it was rare for a member of The High Order of Dradu to make such haste appearances. The visit must be nothing short of vital importance.

He listened nervously for approaching horses as he’d done long before the last bit of daylight was stolen by night, but the rain cut through the sky in thick lines and rapped loudly in his ears like a thousand incessant drummers, blocking out all but the booming thunder. A heavy knock at his door brought him back to his senses.

“What is it?” he called, refusing to part ways with the dreary scene that echoed his mood.
His chamber door peeked open, casting a shard of light over the cobblestone floor of his stay room.

“My lord, Sir Vralis Ottom has just arrived at the gates,” announced the skittish voice of his steward.

A lump fought its way into Durwin’s throat, and he swallowed hard to clear room for his reply. “See him in, Chanstor. I will meet him in the entrance hall.” Durwin sucked a deep breath into his lungs as the door closed behind him, but the attempt to calm himself failed. Vralis Ottom was a kind but powerful man, as were the rest of King Audrick’s twelve high guards, but if he was here to push the will of the king, the will would be done.

He walked across the chamber to where the bed sat and gazed atop the nearby credenza. There lay his most cherished possession, a small pendant made of polished, black stone attached to a thin, golden chain. Engraved perfectly on it was the crest of his brothers, the crest of The Swords of Dradu. He clearly remembered when King Audrick gave the customary gift to him during his knighting ceremony. Not before or ever since has more pride coursed through his veins. He picked it up delicately and let his fingers run over the markings. They were still deep and sharp after all these years.

The years have been far kinder to you than me, thought Durwin, now grey, wrinkled and burdened with age.

The crest was made up of a heater shield, sideways and tilted to the right. Following it was the land of Dradu; to the shield’s left were sharp, horizontal cuts. It was as if the shield was protecting Dradu from their approach. A long sword rested diagonally over Dradu, cutting the land in half, its blade’s tip to the upper right.

Durwin thought of what the cuts symbolized: The kingdom’s enemy during The Great Extradition, a time when the knights under Audrick numbered into the thousands, and Audrick had yet to reclaim the throne. There hasn’t been a war of that magnitude in the seven hundred years since. Often he dreamed of living in such a time, a time when the title of knight meant something more heroic than governing land or ordering around overzealous officers and their footmen. He donned the pendant and felt its power rush through him like flash fire. Even after nearly thirty years of service, Durwin still felt unable to fully master the old and mysterious magic that the stone held within.

His eyes were flooded with torch light and his ears with the excited chatter of more than one hundred strong as he made his way into the upper corridor above the entrance hall. Red banners of The Swords and the purple ones of The High Order hung from nearly every rafter in honor of the High Guard’s arrival.

From the ledge overlooking the chaos, he saw a sea of his footmen below, all dressed in their red gambesons that were usually reserved for battle. Durwin shook his head, annoyed by their eagerness. Surely Vralis was not here to offer palatable news.

Suddenly, the entrance doors were forced open by a blast of chilled autumn wind. The torches of the hall cowered in response, and colored leaves rolled over the threshold to meet the crowd’s feet. Vralis Ottom entered, causing silence to swell throughout the room. While Durwin held court with Vralis many times, it was always in the king’s castle at Bulwarck. It had been years since the High Guard’s last visit to Fort Gunther, and his face was new to most of the footmen that resided here.

Even to the oblivious, there was no mistaking who he was. The dark-purple robes reserved for The High Order peeked from beneath his cloak, but even more telling was the raw power that he exuded, a power similar to, but infinitely more potent than, that of the pendant Durwin wore around his neck.

Vralis Ottom’s black eyes scanned the hall hurriedly, and a chill fell over Durwin as they found him. Refusing to push his dripping brown hair from his face, Vralis summoned Durwin with a nod.

Durwin found himself walking quickly down the stairway to meet him, and he wondered if his men could feel his fear as he threaded through. Something is wrong, he thought as he neared. Vralis’s eyes looked blank, yet determined. He didn’t offer the usual greetings as Durwin approached; he only offered a thick, chilling stare.

“Sir Vralis, it’s a pleasure to see you again,” Durwin lied as he kissed his commander’s gloved hand. The words were coarse as they pushed from his throat, and when they came out, they were without meat.

Vralis offered no reply. Usually he was a man of many gentle words, but thus far his sharp eyes did the talking, and they were not gentle at all. He was a tall man, at least a head taller than Durwin. His clean-shaven face bore slight wrinkles around his eyes and mouth, confessing the age he reached before his gift was discovered by King Audrick. For a moment, Durwin tried to imagine what it must be like to live forever.

“Sir Durwin Maggaster,” said Vralis finally, his voice as cold as his eyes. Vralis almost seemed to be looking through Durwin as he spoke. “An urgent matter has come up, one that we must speak about at once.”

“Y...Yes, my lord. Let us retreat to my private chamber.”

Durwin could smell the country air drifting off Vralis’s cloak as he glided past. The red crowd parted quickly as Vralis led the way towards the stairs. Durwin felt their eyes on him. While some wore looks of pity or fear, most had relief on their faces that they were not the ones chosen to follow. Where was their joviality now? he wondered.

They entered the chamber, and Durwin, for the first time, realized how dark it had become. He eyed the dying embers in the fireplace, their pithy light only strong enough to illuminate the large, limestone mantle containing them. Durwin hurriedly went past his bed to the forgotten fire and prodded life back into it. He turned to see the dark shape of Vralis already across the chamber, staring out at Asper Forest through the balcony entrance.

“Are you feeling well, my lord?” Durwin asked as he approached.

There was no response or any indication that his voice was even heard. Durwin took a moment to gaze at the landscape from alongside Vralis and saw that the storm clouds were waning, their blackness surrendering to the moonlight which now cast a brilliant blue glow over his land.

“So what news do you bring us?”

This time, Vralis looked him over, and Durwin suddenly preferred being ignored.

“Another was found with the gift,” he said calmly.

“The gift?” Durwin stroked his chin’s whiskers. “You mean Arii?” he said after a moment.
Vralis nodded slowly. This was indeed extraordinary news. The power of Arii, as far as Durwin knew, only ever belonged to King Audrick and his twelve.

“So who is this one you found?”

“A boy,” Vralis answered. “A villager in Asper Forest.”

Durwin felt pleasure that such a treasure lived in his forest, but he fought to keep the pleasure from surfacing. Vralis was obviously not pleased by the report, so Durwin was obligated to feel the same.
“So what is to be done?”

Vralis’s eyes were lured back to the landscape. Finally in a tempered voice he uttered, “Asper village, as well as its sons and daughters, must be ended.”

Monday, June 18, 2012

Burning with Impatience

 For reasons I can't explain, I've become obsessed with my lawn this season. My family and I have lived in this house for five years now, and all of a sudden, the state of our yard bothers me. During our first Spring here, I sprinkled around some grass seed just to get our yard out of the mud-pit category. Some grass grew, but mostly weeds took residence. With each progressing year, the weeds seemed to flourish more and more. I honestly didn't mind because green was better than brown, no matter what the greens were comprised of. The weeds were granted sanctuary. 

This year, it all changed. I did research, bought a spreader and weed killer / fertilizer, and before I knew it I was bumbling through my yard with my spreader, casting granules far and wide. Not very used to that sort of thing, I overdid it. There were so many weeds that I figured a little extra "weed and feed" couldn't hurt, and more than likely it would hurl my yard's status into "best on the block" territory at record pace. 

Alas, the weeds checked out, but a lot of grass did as well. While I'm no longer plagued by weeds, I'm plagued by plenty of burned spots instead. I refuse to be perturbed. I will nurse my lawn from out of the critical state it's in. Until it regains the lively green it once held, I will continue to water it and keep tucked in my mind the adage that perfection cannot be rushed. If another reminder is needed this summer, I have no further to look than out of my living room window.

In the same vein, I'm not as far in my novel, The Sorcerer's Paragon, as I would like to be. I'm very excited to get into the editing phase and can't wait to see it come alive as I read it "cover to cover". The difference with my writing is that I've accepted the fact that there isn't enough time in the day to get as far as I'd like as quickly as I'd like. I've learned not to rush. If I push, the story pushes back, and I get nowhere. My creativity and excitement start to wither. When I take my time and let things happen, they flourish. If my brain could apply the same logic to my lawn skills, my grass might make it out alive.

I have probably another four or five chapters to go of the secondary character's point of view. The story from the main character's point of view has been completed, at least from a first-draft standpoint. I'll just keep to my schedule and write when I can.

I think that once I'm done with the first draft and spend some time editing, I'll either post snippets or make them available to anyone who'd like to give them a read. Would anyone be interested?  Maybe Google+ circles would be a way to go: I can share stuff to anyone who wants it by putting those people in a circle.

In other news, I'm in the middle of researching for my other story, the one currently titled "The First Race" though I'm pretty confident that the name will change at some point. Once I get the story outlined, I'll post the summary and maybe get some of the ideas on Google+ as well for folks to read.

Thanks for reading!

-- Tim




Monday, March 26, 2012

With this post, I'm breaking the champagne bottle over the bow of my new blog. I never had a blog, but I am looking for an easy way to get word out to anyone willing to read my stories. This looks like it will fit the bill nicely.

Let me start by saying "Welcome" and "I'm glad you're here!"

This blog came into being one day after my first-ever acceptance letter. It was for my short story entitled "The Death Bump", which will appear in Allegory's May issue. I'm absolutely thrilled! My goal is to get a few short stories published while I work on finishing my first novel. I'm hoping that by the time I'm done with all the revisions and ready to look for a literary agent, I'll have my name out there...at least a little.

I have a handful of ideas for more stories, and I'm excited to get them written down..and to share them with you. A first draft of my next short story, "A Taste" is complete. I am really trying to finish the first draft of my novel before I put more time into the short stories. Another five chapters and I should be there.

The novel is in the fantasy genre, and my short stories have been dark fiction so far. I have some lighter ideas in mind, but the darker ones are definitely a lot of fun.

I think that's all for now. Thanks again for visiting!